Please read and let me know what you think?

There is some nice description in here, especially the hearts racing. It's really good, the only thing is this sentence: "Someone smaller, yet more stunning than him stared straight forward." The beginning of the sentence is a bit strange. Instead of "yet more stunning" write something more along the lines of "attractive". And with this sentence, "Her eyes did not blink, but possibly gazed further in the distance with a glazed look.", take out 'possibly' - it's hard to tell what you mean from this word. Also, having both 'glazed' and 'gazed' in the same sentence doesn't really work that well. Apart from that, it's pretty good. =D