Friday, November 11, 2011

Can you please tell me what you think of this intro to a story I am writing?What's good&What should I improve?

Why don't you start with:" I woke to a bath of cold water. Yesterday spilled over me in tides...." Too much pre-figuring & too little of the moment. You need to engage your reader NOW, not eventually. You do seem to have a definite fantasy/sci-fi genre.

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